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[Ada xD]

Hi guys~ I'm finally creating this thread because lately I've been into writing, and I want to share my works 8D
What you should know about me before you read isss:

1: I'm from Romania... (lol? Surprised? there actually IS a Romanian H!P fan ) so my english is not that good D:
2: I'm bias for everything that has to do with Aichan (), Gakisan, Miya, Maimi x3

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3: I tend to go overboard with the pervyness Though I don't think there are people that mind that lol. Ya'll a bunch of pervs aren't you

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The List

Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 6
(Hiatus)

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Prologue
(Hiatus)


One-Shots

Louder than the Rain AiSayu
Kiss Like Crazy TakaGaki
Blood on my neck TakaGaki
Body Language TakaGaki
Blood on your neck ~Vampire version~ TakaGaki
One silky black dress TakaGaki
Lullaby Game TakaGaki
Koi Choko (Part 1) (Part 2) (Part 3) TakaGaki
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[Snipey]

I read a few paragraphs , hehe this seems interesting , can't wait to read the rest but my stomach is telling me it needs food inside it.

[~asianqueen~]

whew NICE~!!! btw: you're English is almost practically perfect, so its all good. there were a few rough dialogue spots but i wont be nit picky because it didn't affect anything much. (unless you want me to point them out, so you can fix em) but it doesn't really matter, cause the detail was GREAT!

im biased towards aichan too, so you better not make her suffer TOO much~!!! hahaha jkjk
im looking forward to the next update.

i also look forward to your later confession scenes~!!! i like meaningful confessions too.

[pesbs]

@Ada

I like a lot this first chapter, it is very fun to read. I can' wait for the second one to come out, which will happen in 3 more days. That doesn't matter to me, I can wait.
Keep up the great work.

[Ada xD]

@S-N-I-P-E-R : haha omg run I feel dizzy if I don't eat when I have to D:

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stupid diets...

@asianqueen : yay thanks! about the rough dialogues... I can't help it It's not just because I find bad swearings awesome but also because Reina has a split persona better not mess with her when she's pissed
pesbs: thank you! :3 From the second chap things get more interesting

[Snipey]

^ I could never diet...why eat such little food when you could eat a TON! ah that burger tasted good

ohh just read it all..you know I hardly read fanfics but this just makes me wonder how the hell will everything fall in place ? :3
looks promising!

[rndmnwierd]

Woot, I'm glad to see you posted a fic! I totally can't wait for more chapters. *dances around happily*

[Ada xD]

@rndmnweird: yay thanks :3 for commenting on JPH!P too http://www.hello-onl...tyle_emoticons/hello-online/c20.gif
I'll post the second chap tomorrow 8D

[sailormari]

interesting story

i like see you do more

good job

[La'aKea]

Oh hooo: interesting interesting! This looks like something I could get addicted to! I like your writing and the dialogues seemed very good to me (as in: they sounded real and not overdone: after all, they're university students, that's how they would speak).
Can't wait to read more

[KuteKim]

Now this is what I've been waiting for.
Though, I promise you, if it's Ai & Reina together in the end I'll kill you. Yes, I'm biased against my favorite pairings, and TakaGaki happens to be my absolute favorite. It's happened in the last fanfic I read, and I hated it.. Though I love Reina, this is for the sake of TakaGaki.

[Ada xD]

@sailormari: yay thank you!
@La'akea: thank you so much (omg your siggy is adorable ) you have no idea how many times I had to rewrite the dialogues .__. But still I don't think they're appropriate because there will be bad swearings too

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comingfromreina cough

KuteKim: omg thanks X3 I still don't know how it will end, cause I barely started the 4th chap I've always been a sucker for TakaGaki Still, things might change between them in the plot X'D

[La'aKea]

@ Ada : Thank you! (for the siggie appreciation)
Well, congratulations then because the dialogues flow really well, imo. And I find swearing appropriate, if it comes from Reina or a pissed off Ai-chan. I know that in person and in Japan they would probably not say bad bad things, but with their fanfic personalities, I find it appropriate (what's more, this is written by a westerner and not a japanese person, for a majority of western readers, so I think it fits ).
But I'm with KuteKim: thou shall not dare break the TakaGaki!!!! Lol, jk. Things can change, worsen, but get better at the end, right? hehe.

[KuteKim]

Ahh, you may not know who will end up together at the end, but I'll still kill you if it's RenAi in the end. http://www.hello-onl...tyle_emoticons/hello-online/dry.gif

[Ada xD]

Chapter removed due to failness D: lol

[~asianqueen~]

OOOH~! great chapter~!!!!

man, eri is just being her normal dorky self, I just LOVE HER~! she's so innocent cause she can't seem to notice that she's annoying the others...T-T
and how will my TakaGaki find their way together!?!??! T-T especially when reina also.... a little......*wink wink*

i hope you incorporate the rest of the members somehow~

nice update~ i'll wait patiently for the next one~

[FaqU]

Interesting start(s) and I agree with asianqueen, you're english is practically perfect and I wouldn't worry to much about it. If people can understand what is going on, then meh does it really have to be up there with perfection entirely??? I speak english as a first language and I still have trouble...which I still ponder why to this day...

Luckily for me I am unbiased about any pairing so whatever you create, I'm sure will be great (based on the 2 chapters, yes I can feel the drama and anticipate it )

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I am all for the bad swearing from Reina!!!!!! Anything yankii about Reina just attracts me generally Gawd, just gotta love that spunkiness that Reina can be

Oh snap!!!! Ai-chan has got to come up with something to butter up Reina, wouldn't want a pounding

[KuteKim]

^Haha, I wish I was like you..But then again, I'm fine with being biased.

TakaGaki ftw. I wish Reina would leave TakaGaki alone.. Cute Eri needs to be with Sayumin. I hope Sayu is upset that Eri is always with Gaki..
Mmm..right now I think it'll be RenAi in the end, but I hope I'm wrong. Please..let it be TakaGaki.

[pesbs]

@Ada

I like this chapter, it is very fun to read. I can't wait to know what will happen next between Ai-chan and Gaki-san.
Keep up the great work.
Are you the same Ada from Takahashi Ai forum (http://takahashi-ai.foroes.net/)? Since your nickname sounds familiar to me.

[Ada xD]

@asianqueen: In this fanfic Eri isn't actually innocent I like to make her play negative characters bwahaha
@FaqU: Thank you~
@KuteKim: Sayumi? trust me, she is

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very

upset
@pesbs: Yay thanks :3 oxo yes I am I always check Jose's blog, but I barely come to the forum anymore D: