It really brings the reader into the story and gives us a nice perspective into Takitty/Scrooge's thoughts!
Fan Fiction contest II
Started by Himalia™, Dec 13 2007 12:34 AM
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Posted 17 December 2007 - 09:21 PM
Risa/Misa, I love how your story is told in 1st Person. It really brings the reader into the story and gives us a nice perspective into Takitty/Scrooge's thoughts!
It really brings the reader into the story and gives us a nice perspective into Takitty/Scrooge's thoughts!
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Posted 17 December 2007 - 10:05 PM
@Kishimoto Erika: Thanks I first started writing it in third person but I liked it more in 1st so I changed it into 1st person.
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"blame" invis for that ^
Posted 18 December 2007 - 12:56 AM
ok, this is really just hastly put together. i've only read chrisron's entry so far, so sorry if my story is similar to anyone else's.
Ebenezer Scrooge - Ebenezer Ishibashi
Bob Cratchet - Bob Nakai
Marley's Ghost - Tsunku
Ghost of Christmas Past - Yasuda Kei
Ghost of Christmas Present - Takahashi Ai
Ghost of Christmas Future - Junjun
Ebenezer Ishibashi had just finished recording another Utaban episode when one of the staff came up to talk about which artists to invite for the Christmas Special episode of Utaban. He named a few artists and Ishibashi agreed about them, and in the end the staff person added:
"And of course we have to invite Morning Musume, it's their 10th anniversary this year."
Ishibashi dismissed the idea.
"BAA! HAMUBAGGU!", he said. "I couldn't care less for the Musumes."
And after that he went home, irritated.
A few days later he was walking down the street to go shopping some food. He passed another of those big posters promoting MM's new single, Mikan. He ignored it, he didn't even want to look at it. A couple of hardcore H!P fangirls then appeared in front of him. They were wearing Jankenpyon outfits (those red and white gloves are nice to have during the winter), and they stepped up to Ishibashi and one of them said to him:
"Hey, you're Ebenezer Ishibashi! I love your show! I heard about that two hour long Super Christmas Special Live Show you're going to do for Christmas. You're going to invite Morning Musume, aren't you?"
"Yes, please, Mr. Ishibashi!" the other wota girl pleaded.
"BAA! HAMUBAGGU!" Ishibashi replied with angry looking eyes staring at them like he could burn their eyeballs out of their heads.
"Handbag?" one of the girls replied confused and scared.
The other girl took her by the arm and dragged her away from the angry Ishibashi, wanting to get away as fast as possible.
A couple of weeks later, on Christmas Eve, Ishibashi gets home after a long day preparing that Christmas show. When he opens the door to his dark apartment he's met by the ghost of Tsunku and he gets scared and falls backwards out in the hallway again.
"What are you so afraid of?" Tsunku asks.
"Tsunku! You're dead?" Ishibashi replies shocked.
"No, stupid. You're just imagining things. I'm just talking to Nakai over the webcam." Tsunku replies.
Ishibashi then turn the lights on and sees that Tsunku is shown on his big flat screen on the wall and Bob Nakai, his partner in Utaban, is sitting in his chair chatting with him.
"How did you get here before me when you left after me? And why are you here? And why are you chatting with Tsunku?" Ishibashi asked Nakai.
Nakai had no answers to any of the questions and left in a hurry.
"So what do you want?" Ishibashi then asked Tsunku.
"I'm here to tell you about those wotas out there", Tsunku says. "They're going mad if they don't get enough Musume, I tell you. Every time I do a wrong step with my decisions they're on me like bulldogs."
"What's that got to do with me?"
"I know that if you don't invite them to the Christmas Special show, they're not going to be easy on you, my friend. But you can escape this fate. Tonight you will be contacted by three persons. Do as they tell you and you will be okay."
Ishibashi turned off the screen and webcam and went to his bedroom, a bit shaken by Tsunku's words, but still not very happy about the thought of inviting the Musumes to the show.
When he lies there in his bed trying to sleep (strangely enough with his laptop open and ready for chat) he's startled by the voice of a woman.
"Ishibashi!" it calls.
He looks at the screen and sees Yasuda's face.
"AAH!" he shouts. "You're too close to the camera, I can see your pores!"
"Why you...!" Yasuda starts, but calms herself. She backs up a bit and continues. "I'm going to take you back to show you how much you loved Morning Musume before. Watch this video clip."
Yasuda posted a link to an online video. Ishibashi clicked it and it was a clip of old Utaban shows. They were making fun of Yasuda and Iida and praising Goto and Abe. There were some clips of sad shows when members had their last appearance in the show as a Musume. After a while Ishibashi can't stand watching the clips and he shuts down the video and bans Yasuda from his MSN contacts.
A couple of hours later he hears a girl shouting to him with a strange voice.
"Ishibashi! Wake up!" it calls.
"Te-Te-Te-Tetteteke!" he answers when he sees Takahashi's face.
"Hello there, Ishibashi. I know you don't like Morning Musume as much as you used to, but I'm going to show you what you're missing out on. You probably don't think that we are as fun as the former members, but let me tell you that..."
"Okay, okay, okay... Slow down." Ishibashi interupts. "I can't understand a word you're saying. Still, after 6 years in the business you've got that Fukui accent."
"Ara~? Really? Well, watch this anyhow and you'll see what I mean."
Takahashi posted a link to an online video. Ishibashi clicked it and watched it. It was a compilation of many new clips featuring the current line-up of MM doing funny stuff. Ishibashi starts to think that the current line-up might actually be somewhat interesting. He watches the video to the end and goes to bed once again afterwards.
Another couple of hours later he is yet again woken up by a girl's voice.
"Ishibashi~!" it calls.
Ishibashi opens his eyes, takes a look at the screen and says with an confused look:
"Who are you?"
"I am Junjun. I am in the new generation of Morning Musume. From China. Look at this video. It is from future."
Junjun posts a link to an online video. Ishibashi clicks it and is pretty confused about what the chinese girl said about it being from the future. He sees himself sitting on a park bench in old clothes, unshaved and drinking a beer. The video changes to a future Utaban show. Nakai and some other younger guy is running the show now. And again the video changes to a news program with a woman saying:
"Morning Musume has done it again! The third #1 single in a row after the fantastic come back!"
Ishibashi shuts down the video.
"How did you do that?" he asks Junjun. "And why was I thrown out of Utaban?"
"You said bad words about Morning Musume." Junjun answers. "Wotas didn't like it. You were spied on by them and you became a nervous wreck and couldn't take it anymore. And Nakai didn't like what you said about the Musumes too. So he changed you to another man."
"But, but..." Ishibashi started.
"Goodbye."
Ishibashi went to sleep after a long time.
The next day Ishibashi calls Tsunku the first thing in the morning. He tells him that he should tell the Musumes that they're all invited to the special Christmas show. Tsunku thanks him and hangs up. Ishibashi then calls all the other artists and tells them that they can enjoy their Christmas on another show.
And so the Christmas ended with a 2 hour live special Christmas show with the current Morning Musume line-up, and everyone in Japan watched it and fell in love with the Musumes again and went out and bought their new single the next day and made it the best selling MM single ever.
THE END
haha, this was fun.
a bit stressing, though...
Ebenezer Scrooge - Ebenezer Ishibashi
Bob Cratchet - Bob Nakai
Marley's Ghost - Tsunku
Ghost of Christmas Past - Yasuda Kei
Ghost of Christmas Present - Takahashi Ai
Ghost of Christmas Future - Junjun
Ebenezer Ishibashi had just finished recording another Utaban episode when one of the staff came up to talk about which artists to invite for the Christmas Special episode of Utaban. He named a few artists and Ishibashi agreed about them, and in the end the staff person added:
"And of course we have to invite Morning Musume, it's their 10th anniversary this year."
Ishibashi dismissed the idea.
"BAA! HAMUBAGGU!", he said. "I couldn't care less for the Musumes."
And after that he went home, irritated.
A few days later he was walking down the street to go shopping some food. He passed another of those big posters promoting MM's new single, Mikan. He ignored it, he didn't even want to look at it. A couple of hardcore H!P fangirls then appeared in front of him. They were wearing Jankenpyon outfits (those red and white gloves are nice to have during the winter), and they stepped up to Ishibashi and one of them said to him:
"Hey, you're Ebenezer Ishibashi! I love your show! I heard about that two hour long Super Christmas Special Live Show you're going to do for Christmas. You're going to invite Morning Musume, aren't you?"
"Yes, please, Mr. Ishibashi!" the other wota girl pleaded.
"BAA! HAMUBAGGU!" Ishibashi replied with angry looking eyes staring at them like he could burn their eyeballs out of their heads.
"Handbag?" one of the girls replied confused and scared.
The other girl took her by the arm and dragged her away from the angry Ishibashi, wanting to get away as fast as possible.
A couple of weeks later, on Christmas Eve, Ishibashi gets home after a long day preparing that Christmas show. When he opens the door to his dark apartment he's met by the ghost of Tsunku and he gets scared and falls backwards out in the hallway again.
"What are you so afraid of?" Tsunku asks.
"Tsunku! You're dead?" Ishibashi replies shocked.
"No, stupid. You're just imagining things. I'm just talking to Nakai over the webcam." Tsunku replies.
Ishibashi then turn the lights on and sees that Tsunku is shown on his big flat screen on the wall and Bob Nakai, his partner in Utaban, is sitting in his chair chatting with him.
"How did you get here before me when you left after me? And why are you here? And why are you chatting with Tsunku?" Ishibashi asked Nakai.
Nakai had no answers to any of the questions and left in a hurry.
"So what do you want?" Ishibashi then asked Tsunku.
"I'm here to tell you about those wotas out there", Tsunku says. "They're going mad if they don't get enough Musume, I tell you. Every time I do a wrong step with my decisions they're on me like bulldogs."
"What's that got to do with me?"
"I know that if you don't invite them to the Christmas Special show, they're not going to be easy on you, my friend. But you can escape this fate. Tonight you will be contacted by three persons. Do as they tell you and you will be okay."
Ishibashi turned off the screen and webcam and went to his bedroom, a bit shaken by Tsunku's words, but still not very happy about the thought of inviting the Musumes to the show.
When he lies there in his bed trying to sleep (strangely enough with his laptop open and ready for chat) he's startled by the voice of a woman.
"Ishibashi!" it calls.
He looks at the screen and sees Yasuda's face.
"AAH!" he shouts. "You're too close to the camera, I can see your pores!"
"Why you...!" Yasuda starts, but calms herself. She backs up a bit and continues. "I'm going to take you back to show you how much you loved Morning Musume before. Watch this video clip."
Yasuda posted a link to an online video. Ishibashi clicked it and it was a clip of old Utaban shows. They were making fun of Yasuda and Iida and praising Goto and Abe. There were some clips of sad shows when members had their last appearance in the show as a Musume. After a while Ishibashi can't stand watching the clips and he shuts down the video and bans Yasuda from his MSN contacts.
A couple of hours later he hears a girl shouting to him with a strange voice.
"Ishibashi! Wake up!" it calls.
"Te-Te-Te-Tetteteke!" he answers when he sees Takahashi's face.
"Hello there, Ishibashi. I know you don't like Morning Musume as much as you used to, but I'm going to show you what you're missing out on. You probably don't think that we are as fun as the former members, but let me tell you that..."
"Okay, okay, okay... Slow down." Ishibashi interupts. "I can't understand a word you're saying. Still, after 6 years in the business you've got that Fukui accent."
"Ara~? Really? Well, watch this anyhow and you'll see what I mean."
Takahashi posted a link to an online video. Ishibashi clicked it and watched it. It was a compilation of many new clips featuring the current line-up of MM doing funny stuff. Ishibashi starts to think that the current line-up might actually be somewhat interesting. He watches the video to the end and goes to bed once again afterwards.
Another couple of hours later he is yet again woken up by a girl's voice.
"Ishibashi~!" it calls.
Ishibashi opens his eyes, takes a look at the screen and says with an confused look:
"Who are you?"
"I am Junjun. I am in the new generation of Morning Musume. From China. Look at this video. It is from future."
Junjun posts a link to an online video. Ishibashi clicks it and is pretty confused about what the chinese girl said about it being from the future. He sees himself sitting on a park bench in old clothes, unshaved and drinking a beer. The video changes to a future Utaban show. Nakai and some other younger guy is running the show now. And again the video changes to a news program with a woman saying:
"Morning Musume has done it again! The third #1 single in a row after the fantastic come back!"
Ishibashi shuts down the video.
"How did you do that?" he asks Junjun. "And why was I thrown out of Utaban?"
"You said bad words about Morning Musume." Junjun answers. "Wotas didn't like it. You were spied on by them and you became a nervous wreck and couldn't take it anymore. And Nakai didn't like what you said about the Musumes too. So he changed you to another man."
"But, but..." Ishibashi started.
"Goodbye."
Ishibashi went to sleep after a long time.
The next day Ishibashi calls Tsunku the first thing in the morning. He tells him that he should tell the Musumes that they're all invited to the special Christmas show. Tsunku thanks him and hangs up. Ishibashi then calls all the other artists and tells them that they can enjoy their Christmas on another show.
And so the Christmas ended with a 2 hour live special Christmas show with the current Morning Musume line-up, and everyone in Japan watched it and fell in love with the Musumes again and went out and bought their new single the next day and made it the best selling MM single ever.
THE END
haha, this was fun.
a bit stressing, though...
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 01:49 AM
Using a panel of 5 Judges on this one and the last minute post caused a slight delay for the results but that fine
Couldn't get hold of one of the Judges so with respect to mangomalte he had his score averaged from the other 4 Judges for the purpose of what the 5th Judge would of given so he got a fair score.
1 sailormari
2 DarkwinteR
3 chrisron
4 cool_kickin_dude
5 sanrio
6 dee_fleury305
7 DarkL1ghT
8 Risa/Misa
9 mangomalte
10 nic
Very close scores and with only 3 points in total difference between 10th and 7th which showed just how close it was. Quite literally one more Judge could of had quite an effect on the final places. The top was very tight as well.
Bonus points have been awarded to chrisron, dee_fleury305 and Risa/Misa. Since someone else did ask i will state the answer in this post as well. With respect to bonus points it is only myself that awards them.
For his game chrisron got them for simply putting in one of my Christmas wishes with the return of W
dee_fleury305 for my favourite line in all the stories.
Finally Risa/Misa for the most unique story.
Couldn't get hold of one of the Judges so with respect to mangomalte he had his score averaged from the other 4 Judges for the purpose of what the 5th Judge would of given so he got a fair score.
1 sailormari
2 DarkwinteR
3 chrisron
4 cool_kickin_dude
5 sanrio
6 dee_fleury305
7 DarkL1ghT
8 Risa/Misa
9 mangomalte
10 nic
Very close scores and with only 3 points in total difference between 10th and 7th which showed just how close it was. Quite literally one more Judge could of had quite an effect on the final places. The top was very tight as well.
Bonus points have been awarded to chrisron, dee_fleury305 and Risa/Misa. Since someone else did ask i will state the answer in this post as well. With respect to bonus points it is only myself that awards them.
For his game chrisron got them for simply putting in one of my Christmas wishes with the return of W
dee_fleury305 for my favourite line in all the stories.
Finally Risa/Misa for the most unique story.
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 01:54 AM
wow 5 judges!
and cool~ 5th thats pretty good
consider i typed it all up in school 
congrats everyone! Especially SM, this is push you up some spots
good job everyone
hehe Mr.H, now you have this many versions of A Christmas Carol to read to Athena for bed time story
EDIT: honestly i havent had time to read through other's neither
and cool~ 5th thats pretty good
consider i typed it all up in school congrats everyone! Especially SM, this is push you up some spots
good job everyone
hehe Mr.H, now you have this many versions of A Christmas Carol to read to Athena for bed time story
EDIT: honestly i havent had time to read through other's neither
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 01:55 AM
Yay! Bronze medal and extra point! I must admit I haven't had time to read the other stories yet, but I will try read them all during Christmas. I'm sure they're all really good. 
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"blame" invis for that ^
Posted 18 December 2007 - 02:05 AM
aw, i hoped to get higher... but i didn't get last at least.
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And bonus points.
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"blame" invis for that ^
Posted 18 December 2007 - 02:16 AM
^ you know, yours was really something. the first line was like - BANG! *gets knocked down on the floor* "here you go, the worst thing that ever could happen." 
edit: lol, i just noticed that i changed tempus in mine all the time.
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edit: lol, i just noticed that i changed tempus in mine all the time.
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 02:20 AM
mangomalte: I tried to get the point across and I think it worked well. I hope everyone got that Risa being dead was part of the dream though. A dream within a dream I suppose. I was gonna leave her that way but I was like "nah it's Christmas" And that would be too sad.
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 02:25 AM
Well you would of come alittle higher if i had been the lone judge in that but that is what can happen with many judges however you got the bonus points which you thoroughly deserved.
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"blame" invis for that ^
Posted 18 December 2007 - 02:35 AM
yeah, definitely.I was gonna leave her that way but I was like "nah it's Christmas" And that would be too sad.
i guess my thing about my Scrooge not liking MM instead of not liking Christmas didn't work out well... well, it was a lot of fun writing it anyway.
and chrisron, i really liked yours.
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 03:50 AM
congrat eveyone
alot good stories
and thanks sanrio and everyone else the points ready help me
alot good stories
and thanks sanrio and everyone else the points ready help me
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 05:11 AM
Himalia, might I ask which line was your favorite? 
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 05:56 AM
>.< Twice in a row I got 2nd for both fanfic contests... Not that I am not happy but seems such a coincidence
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 11:21 AM
Himalia, might I ask which line was your favorite?
When time came for the meal to begin, they all joined hands and said Grace, which Tiny Kemeko finished by saying, “Even though we don’t have a turkey, thank you God for giving us these tasty bentos.
Was my favourite line there was quite a few others in other stories but this one made me smile instantly as i pictured the entire scene.
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Posted 18 December 2007 - 03:28 PM
and chrisron, i really liked yours.
Thank you. I haven't had time to read yours yet, but I'm sure it's good too.
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Posted 20 December 2007 - 05:19 AM
hahaha..some very creative stuff here....great job everyone!
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