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#1 Miss Behave

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 12:15 AM

Author's note: This is my first attempt at a story so let's see how it goes XD;; Critics welcome. (sorry if the story may be confusing)

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She's Mine...Right?

Chapter 1

It was just another day of dance rehearsal. The Hello! Project 2009 Concert was coming up soon and so all the girls were practicing diligently.

“Ok girls, good work, take an hour break.” And with that the dance instructor left through the doors leaving the girls to go on about their business. The girls split up into the usual groups. The older members all went out for lunch while the kids stayed around to catch up on a little sleeping.

“Gaki-san, come get some lunch with us!” Eri said as she latched herself onto to Risa’s arm with Reina and Sayumi not so far behind. Risa desperately tried to dislodge the arm that was cutting off her circulation to reach her gym bag.

“Hold on, lemme go ask Ai-chan if she wants to join us.” Risa put away her water bottle in her bag and walked over to Ai who was still stretching.

“Ai-chan, we’re going out to eat, care to join?” Risa asked her fellow gokkie member. Ai looked up from her stretches giving a quick glance at the group that has gathered in front of her before giving an answer.

“No, I think I’m going to practice some more.”

Risa quirked her eyebrow, “Uso! We just danced for three hours!” Ai continued her stretching.

“Come on Ai-chan, don’t be a party pooper.” Sayumi was doing one of her famous pouts, sadly it had no effect.

“Sorry, I just think I need more practice.” Risa shook her head. She knew that was a lie, Ai was one of the best dancers in the whole company.

“I know as well as you do that you need a well deserved break. I’m so tired; I don’t think I’m going to be able to feed myself today!” Risa threw her hands up to her head in a dramatic fashion. Eri who was behind Risa jump onto her back from behind with a huge grin on her face.

“Don’t worry Gaki-san, I’ll feed you!” She held an imaginary fork in front of Risa’s face giggling as Risa, Reina, and Sayumi joined in the laughter.

Ai suddenly stopped her stretching; her eye began to twitch as she watched Eri pretending to feed Risa. Reina kept urging Ai. A still laughing Risa gently grabbed Ai by the arm pulling, “Come on!”

In an odd change of mood, Ai said sternly, “I don’t want to go!”

The laughing ceased, that was all the four needed to hear to understand it meant “Leave me alone”. Risa smile instantly deflated, and let go of her arm, Is something bothering her? The atmosphere turned a little awkward as no one moved for what seemed like an eternity. Reina was the first to speak up breaking the silence.

“Ok then…I guess we should leave.” Reina motioned for the other three to follow her. Risa glanced back to Ai to see that she had already started to resume her stretching. Risa debated whether or not to stay and console her friend. Obviously something was bothering her, but Ai had made it very clear that she would rather be left alone at the moment. She heard Eri call to her; she let out a defeated sigh and followed the others out the doors.

Pausing for a brief moment, Ai turned around and stared at her best friend’s retreating back. Eri’s arm once again found its way around Risa’s as they stepped through the door. Even after they left, Ai found herself staring at the closed doors as something within her began to ache. What’s going on with me…I don’t even know why I yelled at Gaki-san…

Just then a pair of arms snaked around her small waist, abruptly pulling her away from her thoughts. Ai gasped, and a familiar voice purred into her ear, “Hey Ai-chan…”

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Risa, Eri, Reina, and Sayu arrived at a small café just outside the studio, sitting at a table by the window. Laughter and nonsense talking could be heard, with the occasional “Uso!” from none other than the famous reaction queen. A couple of minutes passed, and Risa slowly dissipated from the conversation, staring outside the window, finding it that it helped Risa clear up her mind a bit; until she was interrupted by a nudge from Eri.

“Right Gaki-san?” Risa broke her gaze from the window to the smiling girl sitting beside her. Judging from the blank look she was receiving, Eri could tell that Risa hadn’t heard a single word they have said, “I said, ‘Right Sayu is a bigger aho than me’.”

The bunny loving girl crossed her arms, “That was one time! How am I supposed to know that reindeers actually existed?” Reina couldn’t help but choke a little on her tea, trying to contain her laughter.

“Sayu, if you would take the time to pay attention, you would find that there are other animals out there besides bunnies.” Reina gave her a mocking pat on the back. Sayumi brushed Reina’s hand off and pointed at her accusingly.

“At least I know how to type on the computer. You didn’t even know how to do the question mark!” Eri clapped her hands loudly, as she remembered when Reina was tested how fast she could type on an episode of Haromoni. Reina nearly spit out her drink.

Though coughing she rebutted, “Hey! That was…*cough*…completely different. I was just under a lot of pressure that day.”

“Sure you were...hehe.” Eri reached across and poked a very flushed Reina in the cheek.

Risa observed the scene quietly; she couldn’t help but laugh at the shenanigans her younger members would bring up. Chuckling a little, Risa looked down at her tea that she had unconsciously been stirring for the past ten minutes. She loved hanging out with the Rokkies, they were never a disappointment when it came to fun. However she just wished that she could see a certain someone more often, but lately she had been seeing less of her, even less than before when she became leader. She wanted so much to be with her, but every time she tried, it ended in failure. Risa was about to lose herself to her thoughts, when said person was mentioned.

“Man, what was wrong with Ai-chan back there.” Reina simply stated.

“I don’t know, maybe she actually needed practice.” Sayumi nonchalantly sipped her tea. Eri shook her head, “But it’s not like she needed it.”

Reina shrugged, “Maybe it’s that time of the month. That would explain her pissy mood.” Risa spoke up for the first time.

“Come on guys, she’s probably under a lot of stress, give her a break.”

“It’s not like we don’t have stress, but we don’t have our underwear in a bunch.” Reina rolled her eyes. Eri added, “Yeah, and she didn’t have to yell at us.” Sayumi nodded, and was about to speak until Risa slammed her hand on the table (not loudly, and hard enough to get the other three’s attention).

“You guys should be a little bit more considerate, she’s busier than all of us. She’s leader of a nine member group, she’s having to help Linlin and Junjun with the dancing, while trying to keep all of us in check. Not only that she has her drama to worry about and adding a million more things to her already busy schedule. I would think that her own members would understand that most of all.” She eyed each of them, making sure they got her point.

Eri placed her hand on Risa’s arm, “You’re right, we’re sorry.” Risa let out a breath she didn’t even know she was holding. “Yeah, I’m sorry too, I didn’t mean to explode like that. Look I’ll be right back, I need to go to the restroom.” And she got up and left, leaving three members to talk amongst themselves. Sayumi was the first.

“Ay, I kind of feel bad now for being irritated with Ai.”

“Yeah, me too, but Risa is acting strange also.” Eri looked back to where Risa left. Reina shook her head, was she really the only one who knew what as going on between the two. “It’s pretty obvious you guys…” Eri and Sayumi turned their attention to the yankii. “They are in love with each other.”

UUSSSSOO!!!!” Reina hit both on the head. “OH MY GOD! Shut up!” Eri rubbed her head, “Reina how can you be so sure?”

“It’s obvious! Have you ever seen the way they look at each other, and act around each other?” Sayumi pondered a bit, “I guess you’re right…but what do you suppose we do?”

“If you’re right, I think we should just let them go at it at their own pace.” Reina shot down the idea right away, “Dear God, Eri do you know how long that’s going to take?” Eri “ahh-ed” in agreement.

“If only there was some way to get them to notice each other’s feelings…” Eri twiddled her thumbs. Looking up at Eri, Reina suddenly perked up, Ahhh! Why didn’t I think of this before! This is bound to work!

Pulling the other two in, Reina whispered her idea before Risa came back, “This is what we’re gonna do…”


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Thanks to Director_Maiha for helping me :]

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#2 writerjunkie

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 12:27 AM

woot a new fic and it's by you! yay! I'm glad to see you're giving writing a try. Welcome to the fan fic world! lol I like this story so far. It's Takagaki is it? Then I will be watching this fic very closely. lol I want to know Reina's plan! And who was that with Ai?! That should only be Risa! This is a good start. XD Keep it up.

#3 lonewind

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 12:55 AM

i'm liking the chapter!

XD Eri is too funny.
hmm Ai-chan got really jealous seeing Eri put her arms around Risa, but then who hugged her?!?
Reina's plan= *evil smirk* XD

can't wait for the next chapter, good job on this one!
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#4 xtifniax

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 01:03 AM

awesome chapter ;D
hehe, you wrote it about a good pairing too! TAKAGAKI FTWW XD
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i wonder who hugged ai ..
i wonder what the rokkies' plan will be
i wonder i wonder i wonder a lot about your fanfic
i can't wait to read the rest of it =D

update soon~!
keep up the good work ^^
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#5 Director_Maiha

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 01:43 AM

Great job in the first chapter. It's up for a great start. <3 Keep up the good work and np with the helps~

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 02:02 AM

^^ can't wait to see what eri, reina and sayu has in store for the takagaki pair :lol:
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#7 kawaii beam!

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 02:10 AM

AWESOME~! i can't wait to read more^^ keep it upX3

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 02:17 AM

Cool, a new author and a new story. It doesn't seem confusing so far. I like it. There are some hints toward a romance and drama and a few bits of unknown.

You know, it's harder for me to write about their "non-fiction" lives than I thought it would be, and I had some trouble with it. You seem to be handling it pretty easily, though.
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#9 Miss Behave

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 02:34 AM

:) Thanks for reading everyone! ahhh i was so nervous about posting ^_^
Still working on the second chapter, haven't really thought about what to do with the takagaki pair lol
The person hugging Ai might be a problem x]

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 02:56 AM

Wow! I really liked this first chapter. I thought the whole "It's that time of the month" part was funny. Lol, I wanna see what Reina's plan is. It's fun when friends meddle in love situations. I'm also wondering who that person that hugged Ai was,....hmmm....*thinks* I'm glad you posted up this fic, it's really good!

#11 writerjunkie

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 03:00 AM

yes no need to be nervous we're all welcoming to new writers and new fics. :) But I understand what you mean. When I wrote and posted my first MM fic I was so nervous! lol but no need to worry. =)

#12 Glasseyelashes

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 04:33 AM

hmm... just who is the mystery person?

it's good to see you've contributed to the fanfic forum. i like this story so far.

#13 Kaitou1412

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 04:46 AM

Takagaki!! YAY~~~
The part about Reina not being able to type cracks me up <3

awesome fic! Can't wait for your next update XD

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 04:58 AM

Looks interesting. <3 I'll be keeping up with it.

#15 nana777

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 05:15 AM

Nice fic
i love takagaki

i can't wait to know reina's plan
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#16 YukixNatsu

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 09:36 AM

Great Chapter ^^
TakaGaki ^^; <3 <3
I wonder Who's huging Ai-chan???
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I have to much questions about your fic that I can't wait to know all of them!
What will happen?.... What is the Rokkies Plan?... Who can be Risa's Rival if she has 1? :D :D :P.... Is it going to be TanaKamei moment? :<ub: <3

Ok I will stop there!! :D
I'm demand for more MORE :( :P

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#17 jdjohnson

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Posted 26 January 2009 - 09:58 AM

sweet another takagaki!!!
very nice opening.
as with everyone else, i'm also wondering who was hugging ai. kinda didnt think of miki as Yuki&Natsu did. some reason i was thinking of jun.
kinda funny that eri was the only one to figure out that risa and ai were in love with each other. it would seem that reina and sayu were completely oblivious to it all.

looking forward to this and what reina has planned.

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#18 Miss Behave

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Posted 27 January 2009 - 03:29 AM

I'll try to crank out an update by tonight or tomorrow night =]

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#19 niigakirisa#1

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Posted 27 January 2009 - 03:51 AM

Yah a takagaki fic. :huh: wonder who huged ai.

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Posted 28 January 2009 - 03:04 AM

I LOVE THIS STORY!!! WEEEEEEEEE~~~~~~ *spins around*

Obviously I like it for the TakaGaki-ness. But Reina's so funny in here I actually like her more now? XD I was kinda surprised that Sayu didn't get jealous with all the KameMame contact. She probably knows there's nothing between them eh? Oh I can't wait to read more of Reina's little plan. *giggles*
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