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[Nigelkun]

Welcome, gentle netizens of H!O, to the Temple of the Juggernaut.
The Temple will be a thread where I , lord_jagganath, will offer my worship at the various altars of H!P/UFA goddesses.
The scope of my offerings are not limited to :- poetry, art ( drawn, coloured, photomanipulation etc), stories and maybe even videos!
That said, here is my first article of worship i had offered, at the Mano Erina thread.

Joyful Sustenance
the multitude of thoughts,
that arise from the sight of thee,
makes me be elated,
the gaze of,
your clear and earnest eyes,
pierce through my soul,
your beauty is beyond compare,
a distillation of the ages,
glowing in the daylight,
like a muse from nature,
enthuse me with your grace,
charm and humility,
for you are my being of adoration,
clear cut and true,
a reason for living.
and thus of joyful sustenance.

Porting some works from the old poetry thread.. and most of them were published/written before i knew H!P, and it was my first foray into Anime/manga, so much of the feelings of the mangaka still endured within me

all the older dates are the first ones ever published, those with newer 2ndary dates is the 2nd time it was published, and so forth.

2nd published May 02 2007 - 1st publishedJune 02, 2005 =
Wannabe Cassanova -

The moonlight so bright, glimmers in twilight,

glancing off, your sweet brow,

creamy delight, framed by your mane,

of luxuriant, glossy black hair,

tender eyes looking my way, contemplating,

things, i may never know,

the truth is, as much as i long,

to be with you, remaining far,

i am unworthy, of such beauty,

of both mannerisms, and superficially,

as much as i adore, those lips in the twilight,

glistening with promise, gleaming in the night,

thinking what words, would spout,

clear and true, thro’ the parting of,

your graceful lips, serenading me,

my darling Juliet, to me a Romeo,

but you remain a dream, mere thoughts in my head

making this true, be my wish fulfilled,

but for now i’d leave, my words on the cliff,

as i have not the Juliet, i can sing to.

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1st published -September 14, 2006=Twin-ty Poetry ( when i was 20)
2nd published - May 2, 2007

Poem EIN
Looking in your eyes,
drinking in your smile,
this bliss i feel,
is truly bizarre,
holding you,
wrapped up tight,
cloistered away,
inside my mind,
yearning for you,
wanting you,
drives me and my mind,
utterly insane,
just thinking of you,
transcends every feeling,
being with you,
would it be heaven?

Poem ZWEI
Ah, My love,
shine ‘neath the stars,
glittering with promise,
whilst thou share,
this love, o’serendipitious love,
drink in it, we shall,
ever blissfully,
never regretfully,
’tis true, my pure one,
that though we be apart,
and you are not in sight,
my thoughts, actions, and words,
are for naught if not,
for thee.
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the walk

walking is such a breeze

when its with a person you adore

never have to say please

to walk her to her door

but has it to be

she is with him and not me

it makes me feel

lady luck’s deserted me

am i just a pawn

of fate’s cruel game

all i can say is

i’ll find another

but never one with such finesse

nor grace or sophistication

as i walk her to her door

i remind my self

my actions fraught with lies

but tis’ so and i’ll confess to her

my feelings and true passion

are only towards

her.

[Arielsoul]

That's the kind of poetry I'd never be able to write I written some fairly different from yours. I like it!

[kurosawa87]

Simple and unusually set for pauses lol

good job

[Nigelkun]

^ thank you, for the comments. I was hoping to see if i could get some sort of constructive criticism...
I do not follow a set style...or any rules.. hence the odd breaks and sometimes disruptive flow...

and thus, anyone can write poetical prose.!

[Nigelkun]

The Unknown Lover

A word to say thanks,

a gesture of goodbye,

a sign of welcome,

a gasp of surprise,

these things make me think,

i finally have found you,

and i am content,

glad, grateful and euphoric,

the scent of the winter wind,

the sound of the rustling branches,

the texture of the cold earth,

make for a lovely day,

out in nature,

with you by my side,

i would like nothing,

but to be with you,

to be together with you,

to be whole, with you,

nothing but you can make,

my life, oh so complete,

but i as i wake,

form this magnificent dream,

i find myself asking,

“who are you?”

as i haven’t come across a person like you,

so i just go on and

NOMNOMNOM,

on the thoughts of you.

biding my time,

for you,

who ever you may be,

today I know you,

i shall strive for you,

and I will,

make the first step forth.





Routine

I arise in the morning,

gazing at the glorious sun,

the green foliage,

and the twittering birds,

i fire up my pc,

which is quite necessary,

to begin my day,

with the latest happenins,

after a long bath early in the morning,

i offer my obeisances,

to the one who is all,

to the one within,

and the one without,

i break fast,

with a simple meal,

i rush on to the lab,

to continue experiments,

Evening comes,

dinner awaits,

trudge home,

to humbly partake,

on to the pc,

which is quite crucial,

research and facebook,

i do both tasks a time,

Hello!online,

is my current lurk,

my lair remains,

this humble spot,

on the internet.

[SweetHoney]

Wow~ Those are really nice ^^v *hugs* good work. I'll come to worship you for sure ^^

Keep it up ne? I'm really loving these ♥

[Nigelkun]

Haha thanks sweethoney!

Anyway, here is the next piece... an introductory narration to a fanfic.

Nature's Gift to Man



Winter has just ended. Spring is here.
The trees are full of life, the daffodils have cycled, the cherry blossoms have bloomed.
The lake is teeming with fish and waterfowl, chicks abound.
amidst this serene scene, there lay a singular figure, strewn by the bank of the lake.
He contemplates life as he looks to the sky, watching the ever-changing wisps of clouds in the otherwise clear sky.
He closes his eyes, drinking in the sights, sounds and scents.

He drifts off to a light sleep, flitting between dreams and emptiness.


:chirping sounds, a rustle of leaves, sounds of grass being trod on:


A shadow hovers over his face, blocking the sun's rays on his face.
After the initial blackness, he took in the face that was above his.
Her eyes like ebony danced over his features as he sought to comprehend the beauty that has above him.
Her smile shone like a thousand suns,
Her gleaming ivory teeth contrasted with her olive complexion framed with auburn hair, which hung down over him, for she was bent over overhead.
He sat up abruptly when he recognised her, barely brushing his nose over her bare shoulder.
She smiled serenely at him, grabbed his arms and pulled him up across the meadow adjoining the lake.

He was too surprised to react, he let her lead him on.
It was only then he glanced down her white sundress to her toned and muscled thighs.
Gasping at its magnificence, wrenching his head up.
he could have gazed at those glorious thighs all day long, but he didn't want to be rude.

He knew his adventure, with that frivolous, energetic girl, had only just begun.

[kurosawa87]

The Unknown Lover - Quite a scenery poem, a lot of nature shots came into mine

Routine- Nice you have the routine like that, I am currently housed someplace else

Nature's Gift to Man: Interesting way to mention your favorite member I assume or a current crush that is too far away for now

[Nigelkun]

22-san .. thank you.. the unknown lover is meant to be tongue in cheek...
and the narrative is specific to Ms Thunder Thighs, Kamei Eri.. ... who happens to be one of my preferred members, isn't on top... but she is perfect for the fanfic...

[Glasseyelashes]

this is just what this sub-forum needs. i'm a really big fan of poems, and the like. after reading what you've written so far, i suppose i'll have to succumb to worship you, juggernaut.....well you're a close second to my beloved morning musume.

really awesome stuff you got here. i like it alot.


ps, everytime i read your screen name, i think of x-men.

[Nigelkun]

^ just for you then, Glasseyelashes ..
http://thejuggernaut...uusan-sai-desu/

[Glasseyelashes]

^i bet you have a tattoo of that exact photo on your left bicep. am i right?

[Nigelkun]

^ nah.. I don't .. not a fan of tattoos... gotta think of being a wiry old man you know...

OK! Next update on :-
Nature's Gift to Man

Breathlessly, our dear protagonist, blew along with the seemingly human gust of wind.
Hand in hand, her firm fingers grasp his palm, they drifted over the meadow rapidly, her shrill laughter filling the clear air.

She stopped in the middle of the field.
He felt his hand fall limp to his side.

He stood there for what seemed an eternity, whilst she turned around to face him.
Her countenance seemed dark as she looked at him in his eyes.
Her irises were as dark as the darkest coals, but she looked at him imploringly.
All this while, not a word had been spake, yet it seemed they had shared so much, in those fleeting moments.
He gave her his inquisitive look, for he knew not of her longing.
Her pursed lips, the tremble of her chin and her tearing eyes suggested that she was in distress.
He felt crestfallen, wondering what he may have done to make such an ethereal being sad.
He made his face turn away from the sight before him, fearing to see what it may become.
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Silence, broken only by the blast of the last winter's wind, and the rustling of the trees.
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He felt a pair of strong, lithe arms clasping around his neck.
Instinctively he wrapped his arms around her lower torso, below her buttocks, lifting her up to eye level.

Eye to eye, he found his fears unfounded.
She was smiling at him, positively beaming.
He couldn't help but smile back. She, in that few moments that had seemed a lifetime, had become a being of meaning to him.
He thought to himself, that must be her nature, to jest and toy, yet love unconditionally.
She had wanted a true feeling, to find meaning, to leave all her troubles behind.
He wanted to give that security to her, the feeling of comfort.

Heads on each others shoulders, he took to the soft grass as a tree felled, landing with a soft thud, with her body on him.

They drifted off into blissful sleep, her head on his chest, in the middle of the meadow.

It was spring, when his muse found him.
May the gentle caress of the spring breeze, comfort and soothe them.

END/Introduction ... More to come? what do you think?

(removed older works, moving it to the top post ( introductory)

[kurosawa87]

that is a lot of poems, it has many happy moments in there. The setup is fine but do you have content that is more darker in nature, I like the variety in the people's writing and especially I am a dark type of person when it comes to interaction. Overall, I like it but this seems a little too sweet for my taste buds

[turbos86]

Nice work Juggernaut. A question for you, are you writing poems about Mano Erina (Not including the ones you have previously wrote, before you found out about H!P, and not about Routine)? Specifically in The Unknown Lover, I couldn't find any direct H!P reference in any of the lines.
*Friendly reminder: H!P related materials only please

[Nigelkun]

turbos86 : even the ones which i have written before i found H!P .. is relevant to H!P .. I was looking for a muse , and I found a whole bunch of them. So you could say that those are retconned into being dedicated to them.. ( and yes the unknown lover is an allusion to all of them.. )

And it would suffice to say, the older ones will still be on my webpage, and no more of the older works would appear here.

Thank you for your reminder . I am in the process of preparing works which have a less subtle allusion to the ones whom i adore.

[kurosawa87]

well my suggestion is to say in the title who you are referring to, makes it easier and because of the update in the rules too

[turbos86]

^ That's not actually a rule. I am leaving it open to the thread starters to decided if they want to announce who they are writing about in the thread titles or not.

Anyways, this is starting to get off-topic.

Looking forward to more poems from you, The Juggernaut, keep up the good work!

[Nigelkun]

^Thank you!

and 22-san... err... dark poetry is not my thing, there is enough darkness around... I shall be the light.

but since you asked .... in 10 minutes, dark poetry! ( ok more like despair poetry, but i suck at verbalising my feelings)

Disparity of Souls

She lay on her bed,
as stiff as a corpse,
tears welled up,
her sobs stifled,
"why did she have to go",
thoughts flowed,
"we were meant to be"
she cried out,
"Oh why my love,"
"did you tire"
the tyrant's rule,
"I would have come"
but she forbade it,
twas never to be,
though was right,
abruptly she got up,
straightened bob,
wiping the tears,
blotchy smudges,
"blasted men"
she sat in the bath,
brushing hair,
"but our love"
"it was pure"
simple and true,
nevertheless scandalous,
tide of emotion,
ebbed away,
water drains,
gurgles complete,
towel wrapped,
a small figure,
crumpled in a corner,
this fact is,
Disparity of souls.

(time frame = 2007 : is the hint enough?)

[kurosawa87]

well it is dark but it has a point of comedy in it, it was worth a try, good job