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#41 ichigostrawberries

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Posted 27 April 2009 - 04:42 PM

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CRASH!

The sound of feet running down the hall could be heard even over the thunder. When she got to the doorway, my name was called out softly.

CRASH!

Her small body fell to the ground in fear, and I awoke. I heard her moaning, and motioned for her to come to my bed. She crossed the room, slowly and nervously, until the thunder sent her running to my side. She crawled in beside me, and I sat up. I put my arm around her for comfort.

A flash of lightning, and she buried her face in my neck, holding on tightly to my arm. I stroked her hair. "I thought you loved storms like these."

"I did...but I had a bad dream about them...I'm not sure I like them anymore."

"What happened?"

"It took you away."

"Hey, it's just a dream. It's not real." I lifted her chin. "Look at me. I'm here, aren't I?"

She nodded, and wiped her wet eyes. "But...it seemed so real. What if...it happens one day?"

"Shh. Don't think about it." I brushed her hair out of her face with my hand. "Are you ok?"

"I think so."

Without a word, I lay back down and turned away from her. After a few seconds, she shifted positions and put her arm around me.

"Aika?" Her voice was still shaky.

"I'm here, Chiyo." I patted her hand. "I'm here."

She said nothing else. I realized that she had fallen back asleep.

"Oyasumi." I whispered, then closed my eyes.



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#42 TakaGakiFTW

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Posted 28 April 2009 - 07:59 AM

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#43 LexLyp

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Posted 28 April 2009 - 03:13 PM

^
That was pretty good.
Don't worry, age is just another number. :lol:

#44 TakaGakiFTW

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Posted 29 April 2009 - 01:58 AM

^Thanks very much for the compliment. ^__^

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#45 writerjunkie

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Posted 29 April 2009 - 09:00 PM

aw this one-shot was cute it wasn't that bad. And yes age doesn't matter that much. I wrote my first fan fic when I was 12 and I kept writing even though I was young. So don't worry. Just keep writing. :unsure:

#46 TakaGakiFTW

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Posted 30 April 2009 - 02:18 AM

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#47 KaPouk

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Posted 30 April 2009 - 11:04 AM

@TakaGakiFTW good job for your one shots :wub:

You

I grinned at her widely and tackled her down to the floor. I sat on her stomach and pinned her arms down.

"Gotcha."

She looked up at me frowning,"That's not fair."

I mimicked what she said to me moments ago and put on my best innocent face,"Life's not fair you know."

She sighed and pouted at me, totally defeated.

"Okay. You get to eat."

"Ha!"

"Now can you get off?"

I remembered we were still in this -ahem- awkward position and started to move away when the evil me took over. Grinning at her I leaned down until we were almost nose to nose.

"I don't wanna."

She gave a visible gulp and squeaked. I swear she squeaked.

"Get off..Please?"

I smirked internally. She's so cute like this.

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Hurting or Healing?
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Risa feeling is really deep, stayed under tha rain during 5 hours... Waouh!

Keep up your work ^^
Ganbatte ne!

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#48 LexLyp

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Posted 30 April 2009 - 12:07 PM

That's FAR from making me gag.
Good job. :wub:
Keep it up.

#49 writerjunkie

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Posted 01 May 2009 - 12:07 AM

pffffh! Make you gag. NOT true! This was very cute! :good: I like the touch of drama and a bit of angst. Two of my favorite things! :lol: hehe TakaGaki! The cutest pairing ever! haha See, this is good. Nice one-shot. *blushes* I'm not that great of a writer you know. I've seen other writers that are just AMAZING in anything they write. My only strong point seems to be one-shots.

#50 mame*hime

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Posted 01 May 2009 - 06:40 AM

Our Moon

The Moon reminded me of our love.
Stained yet beautiful.
Beautiful yet Lonely.
Lonely yet Loved.
Loved yet Broken.


This fic could be talking about anyone. I like how you left it up to the reader. And the last bit was beautiful :)

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Hurting or Healing?

OMGosh, Takagaki!! XD

This one-shot was good. Yay that they got together in the end. Risa is really strong to still be fine after 5 hours in the rain :lol: The quarreling part was so sad. It’s obvious they like each other yet they pushed each other away at different times :lol:
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#51 TakaGakiFTW

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Posted 01 May 2009 - 09:24 AM

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#52 LexLyp

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Posted 01 May 2009 - 03:40 PM

Sweet.
Very sweet.

The line "more often than not life is actually stranger than fanfiction.", got me thinking.
Like really thinking.
That line has a lot of truth.
So, I wonder just how strange MM is in real life away from the camera. :unsure:

You have more one-shots?
Looking forward to them. XD

#53 meowz

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Posted 02 May 2009 - 12:30 PM

Life like Fanfiction is awesome. Its so good I delurked to make a comment :w00t:
I like the way their conversation went, very natural.
And your other tanakamei one-shot 'You' was great too.
I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for your updates.

#54 writerjunkie

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Posted 02 May 2009 - 12:58 PM

haha see you got a lurker out. That's how you know your writing is good! This one-shot was cute. I never make enough TanaKamei one-shots, probably because I think TakaGaki would do better. *shrugs* I liked how you started it and the way Reina and Eri spoke. Keep writing, because practice makes perfect. :w00t:

#55 Glasseyelashes

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Posted 03 May 2009 - 05:55 AM

WOW!! that was such an amazing one-shot!! i always found them to be hard to write, so i never try to. i realllly hope you write more. your writing style is so easy to read and it flows so naturally. i loved it.

#56 mame*hime

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Posted 07 May 2009 - 01:52 PM

Life Like Fanfiction

Wahhh the title is interesting and the concept behind the fic incredible. I can't wait till you get your own thread. It's gonna be filled be tons of awesome fics ^_^ I can feel it!

Like, LL, I look forward to more of your writings ^^
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#57 writerjunkie

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Posted 07 May 2009 - 08:43 PM

see if Mame said that then you're writing is good and you have great stories. Mame knows good stories, she is a great writer after all. *nods*

#58 kamegoo

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Posted 08 May 2009 - 08:13 AM

@ Hammziie~ Un. The moon was really beautiful when i wrote that! ^_^
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#59 Haru.Mc

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Posted 08 May 2009 - 05:19 PM

I love all the TakaGakiFTW fic's :)

You're pretty good ^_^

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#60 GoodMorningXD

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Posted 09 May 2009 - 01:38 AM

I don't believe myself. How did I not discover these, because they're sooooo cute. *squeals*
Hahaha. TWO TANAKAMEIS AND ONE TAKAGAKI~ THIS IS WHAT I LIVE FOR~
The dialogue between your characters is really adorable. Especially all the TanaKame interaction. And Ai's mom is so cool~ XD <3

Keep it up! I just found another writer to root for. *waits patiently for you to become a kouhai and invade the fan art forum with your own thread* and then... ONTO WORLD DOMINATION~ XD

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